“We tell ourselves stories in order to live.”
― Joan Didion, The White Album
And I got it from our prompt over at the imaginary garden with real toads.
Whisper me your words;
I'll draw them in like silken strings
and wrap them like a fist.
Once to hear you.
Twice to feed you.
Four to see you, again
in my shining eyes.
Tell me your tales;
I'll take your story for a spin
and try it on for size.
Once to hear you.
Twice to feed you.
Four to see you, again
in my dying eyes.
Sing me your serenades;
I'll feel them flutter down my throat
and swallow them: whole.
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There's a good chance I'll regret this in the morning. "This" being: publishing the above poem before looking at it with clearer eyes. Meh. Whatevs. That there's a first draft crafted by a sleepy brain that just wants to lay in bed and listen to music. But also write stuff. Mission (mostly) accomplished. Nighty night y'all.
I think it is gorgeous... love that last stanza.
ReplyDeletePlease, no regrets! I love its mystery and magick, and that chorus. The poem itself feels like part of a strange tale or legend.
ReplyDeleteThis is so intriguing... a really complex and impactful air to this poem. Absolutely loved the imagery :D
ReplyDeleteHave a great week ahead :D
There's a dark sensuality in these words I quite enjoy.
ReplyDeleteWow! This is poetry at its finest! My first read of the day, and it is an impressive one.
ReplyDeleteeat these words. they are eternal.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem, last stanza esp. loaded.
ReplyDeleteAh, this is lovely, Katy. There is something of a magic charm here, in the repetition.
ReplyDeleteI love this! Your opening lines are fabulous. I so enjoyed your use of repetition. I see no reason for poetic regrets. Thank you so much for participating in the challenge!
ReplyDeletethere is a romantic quality to this poem, i like very much, such a charming write
ReplyDeletehave a creative month
much love...
First drafts are the most creative after that it's the craft. Very interesting and a great read.
ReplyDeleteZQ
Yikes-I love the way your wove your web-intriguing!
ReplyDeleterepetition works wonders, here ~
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